Lady Sydney

Nice, very nice. I liked the idea behind it, but it seems like something's missing that would make this "fantastic". I can't put my finger on it, but it's there. ...

Thanks for your compliment and suggestion, Gilth. ^_^ I will be posting another poem later on in the week, if you're interested in reading. It will, of course, be Romance. ...

Hiya Beefcake! Awesome username, by the way. :wink: Welcome to the ever so addictive YWS. You will soon find how hard it is to actually log off of here; it's ...

It could be just me, but you don't sound too appreciative of what we've said. You posted what you had, and we critiqued it. Nowhere in your story did you ...

Here we go: "This is my first chapter guys!!!!! And here begins the tale of the two girls who ran away from home and ended up dying because Mr. Tinybot, ...

Your favorite? Really? Wow. Hehe Thanks! ^_^ As for the scene with Charlotte falling, I have to agree that it IS a bit weird. I'll try to see if I ...

It's sweet that they fell in love and all, but that would still kinda weird me out :shock: I don't know what I would do if I found out that ...

Hey, there. ^_^ I liked the content of your chapter, but it didn't really go anywhere and there wasn't much to visualize. I noticed your main issue in this piece ...

uhh... I don't know! lol I want to say JabberHut, but I think that's the wrong person. ^_^ Anyway. Funniest Member(s)

That was great! I loved every stanza except for the first one. The rhyme seemed kind of forced, to me. But, other than that, this was really good. :) Your ...

Are you kidding me??? You are gorgeous !! That's a great picture of you, trig. ^_^

8/10 That's cute! ^_^

Teacher: Where's your homwork? Student #1: At home. Teacher: Well, you know you're getting a zero then, right? Student #1: Ya know, Ma'am, I heard that the election for Teacher ...

Uhh... I don't know. That's hard. It was Doctor Kitty the other day! XD Weirdest Username

Thanks Jabber and Andy for putting this through the shredder and picking out all the little mistakes and improvements I can make. Very helpful! ~Syd